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My first real attempt at making a webcomic. My experience with what I believed was my first love.

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Not too bad for a first go, just some criticisms that hopefully you'll find constructive.

I could barely read the white text on the pale blue background. If you have to use white text give it a black border.

The tiny little snippets of text commenting on your own comic all the way through distract from the narrative (such as describing the picture of Nath, the review of Marley and Me and 30th panel snippet). In other parts the tiny text could've just been made to be part of the narrative, it felt like a footnote when it didn't have to be.

Comic was pretty long, consider spending more time boiling it down to the minimum to get the message across.

The life lesson you're sharing is hardly new to anybody, make it unique in some way. Thank you for not dwelling on the pain of a break up.

That said I did enjoy the writing style in several parts.

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Original Poster1 point · 6 years ago

Thank you very much.

I must say it was a step up from the usual things I write about. Normally I just try to take a comical approach to everything and anything in my blog entries, so it was hard to negate from old habits with the small writing.

And that's another problem, I seem to go overboard with everything when it comes to writing, both a blessing and a curse I suppose.

I'll certainly take it on board though for the next 'life lesson' post should I ever write one.

Thank you for reading! x

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